The wind with streams of heat hitting your skin,
Beautiful grass swaying in the wind with flower seeds flying into the air and into the
ground to reopen and spread its looms
Girls in there two peice swimming suits
I in my one peice speedo swimming itno the water and out like a Dolphin in the open
Faster I go the better i feel farther the shark the better i am to be with anybody.
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Wow Patrick,
This is a funny post because you are the only person i know that would write something like this. Although, one thing i didn't like about the post was the mental picture i got in my head when you said "I in my one piece speedo." Sorry but that was just a disturbing picture. But i like this becuase of the detail like about the grass and stuff. Nice work, keep posting good blogs and I'll keep commenting. peace.
-emma.
Hey Patrick! I didn't know that you enjoyed summer love. You had great detail, because you described everything so that i could see it in my head( such as the spedo ). You should continue to write poems like this. Great job.
Patrick, this is beautiful and inspirational writing. When Bergquist says, “Put your soul into these blog entries,” I felt you not only did that, but took it a step further. I could really picture the scene and surrounding of your writing in my head because of your superb vivid detail. We need more magnificent blog entries like this one. Thank you Patrick Parnell, I am honored to read your uplifting and inspiring literature.
I didn't know you wrote poetry Pat. The poem had good attention to detrail because you painted a picture with your words. The imagery is interesting. Pretty funny though. Nice job, keep on writing.
Patrick nice i loved this peice. If only all summers were like that. I liked this because you explained the girls in there 2 peices. and the grass and the trees. all in all it was a great poem.
Hey Pat. This accutally made me laugh. I would never would think of you to write a poem. Very nice this is a great poem it was very creative. Nice Job Patrick.
Uhm... wow pat. This is... special. I liked it because it was amusing. But I agree with Emma.. The speedo part was a little bit unnerving. lol! :D
Patty-
I loved this poem.
It reminds me of the good ol days in the summers.
When everyone would go to Deer lake.
Haha, good times.
You did great on this entry, because you had great word choice, and amazing detail.
Wow Patrick. Thats...beautiful. I like this because it's really funny. (= But i kinda have a mental image in my head of you in a spedo and that ain't pretty.
i liked this because it was funny. i bet when bergquist was reading this he was wondering if you were on drugs or something lol. how do you think of these things? You should be a poem writer. good job on your poem it was funny.
I like your post because it makes me feel all tingly... Mmmmmm.
Wow, i didnt know you wrote poetry, i also didnt know you like wearing speedos. Anyways, I liked this because it was funny and had good analogies.
I like his because it reminds me of summer. Though summer is not here yet... But I agree with layla don't do the speedo thing. Keep your pants on. It had a lot of detail. But still, keep your pants on =P
yea son
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